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Post by cassieandriea on Wed Jul 25, 2012 6:50 pm

I promise I will keep this story updated cause the storyline is something I've wanted to write for a long time, but never really had the time too. So since I figured I'll have a lot of time in car rides around England, it would be perfect. I've had this idea for about 6 years, since I was maybe 10, and it's evolved since then. I plan on writing a good amount of chapters, if people like it. I can take critism, I can definatly take it, so please leave it. And be honest, not just 'I like it'. I would like to know what you do/don't like. This is the first story I plan on writing compltly by myself because the idea is something that's hard to explain. The only thing I have to say is, it won't be dragged on, also, the title may change through it. Lastly, it's based on a few movies put together and might be a little bit strange at some points. It's a everything story, and it is not based on a true story, its based on movies and my 10 year old + mind. So heres the preview, I plan on putting the first chapter up sometime this week.

-- preview.

Luck & Grace were girls, Dylan was a boy. It's as simple as that. Their story is not a love story. Their story is unique. Normal kids play outside and sleep in a warm bed, but they weren't so lucky. They are 13, 12 and 15. And their up against 59 of Indiana's finest. Their mission is to prove the death of Jackson Hall. They have 90 days to do so, or else everything is gone. Maybe they don't have a perfect attendance record at school, or a drivers license. They are young. They are friends. They are family. Their story starts in a park, just like any normal kids. Except they have a mission, which could cost them their life.


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Post by Badge on Wed Jul 25, 2012 8:12 pm

THTHTHTHTHT BEGGINING IS JUST :OOOOOOOOOOOOOO breath taking!
amazing, NOTHING SAID GENIUS love it!
and R0FL this just came to my mind 'where you say that they are young, you could put some bruno lyrics R0FL around and like they are young. they break free. they dont fight. they are glee OR SOMETHiNG ROFL glee. rlly?

but in general me likey it ^^ can you make the other partsss
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Post by StacyღNarnia on Wed Jul 25, 2012 8:57 pm

I was like captured in le first line:DD

I love how it is like a cliff hangr I cant wait to read it

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Post by ♥BlueRainbow on Thu Jul 26, 2012 3:30 pm

This preview is great! :D
I really like how they are very young, because in most stories
I read the characters are like 16-19.
I also love the ending of the preview. It really gets me excited. :3
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Post by PumaEdenBlue9 on Thu Jul 26, 2012 3:56 pm

cliff hanger!

Love it :D
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Post by cassieandriea on Sat Jul 28, 2012 4:04 pm

Thank you all so so much, it honestly means a lot to me, I hope you like the actual story c:

Little update;
The first chapter(s) will be up either today or tomorrow.
And also, there won't be much talking in the first couple chapters, because its just basically introducing the problem and such.
And last,
by the 3rd or 4th chapter I can pretty much for sure say you'll know what 2 movies I'm combining, so if you'd like to go watch or read about the movies, to get a better understanding you can do so, I'll say in the beginning of the 5th the movies, for those who can't get it, but it will be pretty clear.
Anyway,
I'm halfway done with the first 6 chapters, I've had a lot of time to write in the pass days, *cough* Cassandra messing our flight up *cough*, but I just have to edit them.


**There will be a new thread for the story**

That's basically it, hope you like it c:

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[22:24:11] @ clay : IT' OKAY THE FACT THAT IT IS MISPELLED JUST MEANS THAT YOU'RE HAPPY TO SEE ME
[22:24:17] @ clay : i hope



[20:04:46] @ clay : “We'll be Friends Forever, won't we, Pooh?' asked Piglet.
[20:04:54] @ clay : Even longer,' Pooh answered.”
[20:05:11] @ Gabi : ur making me cry
[20:05:30] @ Gabi : salty eye pee


[20:55:21] @ Liz : WHAT i can't propose unless i buy a ring
[20:55:25] @ Liz : what is this

[18:39:09] @ Liz : wtf you're parents knew what they were doing
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Post by peach rays bri on Sat Jul 28, 2012 7:27 pm

I like this

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Post by Caitlin on Sat Jul 28, 2012 7:27 pm

Good, lots of short sentences which make it more interesting and captivating.
Looking forward to reading more.
I like this

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Post by Zion on Sat Jul 28, 2012 11:23 pm

WILL YOU MAKE MORE?
i really like it.
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Post by cassieandriea on Wed Aug 01, 2012 8:29 pm

chapter 1 just got put up.
sorry if its kinda like darkish, it's just how the story starts off.

thanks again for the comments, it means a lot xx

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[22:23:43] @ Mikayla : MY LOGE
[22:23:44] @ Mikayla : *LOVE
[22:23:46] @ clay : MK
[22:24:11] @ clay : IT' OKAY THE FACT THAT IT IS MISPELLED JUST MEANS THAT YOU'RE HAPPY TO SEE ME
[22:24:17] @ clay : i hope



[20:04:46] @ clay : “We'll be Friends Forever, won't we, Pooh?' asked Piglet.
[20:04:54] @ clay : Even longer,' Pooh answered.”
[20:05:11] @ Gabi : ur making me cry
[20:05:30] @ Gabi : salty eye pee


[20:55:21] @ Liz : WHAT i can't propose unless i buy a ring
[20:55:25] @ Liz : what is this

[18:39:09] @ Liz : wtf you're parents knew what they were doing
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