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The Secretive Garden
Introduction: This story is about a girl who find herself in a magical garden after she runs away from her life. She doesn't know what to except, and doesn't trust anyone until she finds Mariah.
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~Chapter 1~
It was a cold night, just in the beginning of May. It's always cold here. I set the note on the table, grabbed my backpack and head out the door, and closed it ever so silently. Allow me to introduce myself, i'm Ariel. I'm 12 years old, and I'm running away. After I closed the door, I ran and ran, past the wilted dying forest in my backyard, and jumped over the fence. I don't remember falling asleep, but when I woke up it was in perfect weather condition, and I was in a magical looking Garden. Flowers and beautiful trees were everywhere. The grass was the greenest i've ever seen. There looked like there was enough food to stay here, so I decided to find a way to build a house. It was summer, so I didn't have to worry about school, thankfully.
That's all. Thanks for reading. Pleasee post back what you thought!
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~Chapter 1~
It was a cold night, just in the beginning of May. It's always cold here. I set the note on the table, grabbed my backpack and head out the door, and closed it ever so silently. Allow me to introduce myself, i'm Ariel. I'm 12 years old, and I'm running away. After I closed the door, I ran and ran, past the wilted dying forest in my backyard, and jumped over the fence. I don't remember falling asleep, but when I woke up it was in perfect weather condition, and I was in a magical looking Garden. Flowers and beautiful trees were everywhere. The grass was the greenest i've ever seen. There looked like there was enough food to stay here, so I decided to find a way to build a house. It was summer, so I didn't have to worry about school, thankfully.
That's all. Thanks for reading. Pleasee post back what you thought!
Last edited by ClairDaWriter on Sun May 01, 2011 2:04 am; edited 1 time in total
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This is really good! Loved it, like you other stories. This is a great story and I loved how you added a little color and the green goes perfectly with the story so far cause it's a garden and the text is green so well done! I LOVE it. Lol. Can't wait for more and more!
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Ooo, I'd really like to see more. =) Please update I love it!
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I love it <3
Please update,it's a really good!
Please update,it's a really good!
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Chapter 2
I decided to take a look around, maybe see if I could find anything useful to build a house. I saw an old tree, that looked about ready to topple over and fade away into the unknown. I shivered, this part of the garden seemed really cold. I looked to the side, and saw the old wilting forest I just ran from. Then, I looked to the other side, and saw an endless meadow. I wonder what lies beyond here. Just then I heard a rustle in the wilting bushes from where I just ran from. "Come out now! I'm not afraid of you!" I said demandingly. Just then, a girl about 14 came out of the bushes. "I-I'm Mariah." She said shyly. "I just ran away.." I looked at her, as if she just dropped out of the sky, and was talking a foreign language. "Uh, Hi? I'm Ariel, I ran away too." I said befuddled. What on Earth is going on!
I decided to take a look around, maybe see if I could find anything useful to build a house. I saw an old tree, that looked about ready to topple over and fade away into the unknown. I shivered, this part of the garden seemed really cold. I looked to the side, and saw the old wilting forest I just ran from. Then, I looked to the other side, and saw an endless meadow. I wonder what lies beyond here. Just then I heard a rustle in the wilting bushes from where I just ran from. "Come out now! I'm not afraid of you!" I said demandingly. Just then, a girl about 14 came out of the bushes. "I-I'm Mariah." She said shyly. "I just ran away.." I looked at her, as if she just dropped out of the sky, and was talking a foreign language. "Uh, Hi? I'm Ariel, I ran away too." I said befuddled. What on Earth is going on!
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Yes! Finally it out. Yay! It is aweomse! I have a guess of what will be going on but as always I could be wrong. Lol. MORE! Lol. Way to go Clair! You should make a website and then fill it with books and stories! Lol. Nice job, Clair. LOVED it!
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maybear209 wrote:This is really good! Loved it, like you other stories. This is a great story and I loved how you added a little color and the green goes perfectly with the story so far cause it's a garden and the text is green so well done! I LOVE it. Lol. Can't wait for more and more!
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Thanks so much, May! You always know how to make my stories feel appreciated. Along with all those who post back. (:
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wow!! that's some great writing there!
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